[Harue]

I made up my own manga series called Fantaji?!. When I learn how to draw (which could be a LONG time...) I'm gonna write the manga. Here's the plot/story:

Sennyo Nanami is an elemenrty school girl who thinks the world is boring becuase everything is so... realistic. She wishes there could be some kind of twist in her very regular life that no one thought could possibly happen. But that all changes when she meets a water fairy named Kaikaku and a mermaid named Maika on an unpopular saltwater beach. Nanami begs them to transform her into a fairy or mermaid but they find her to be a pest and tell her the honest truth: it's impossible. However, Nanami is determined to become a fairy or mermaid and befriend Kaikaku and Maika.

What do you think? Its it creative? Is it corny? Does it remind you of another manga? Speak your mind, and flam if you must!

[holabunny]

I dont know what to make of it really. Seems kinda corny, a girl stuck in reality. how about more of a twist, add some romance. The thing is that the story is mildly redundant, she wants a twist, she meets fairies and mermaids, and asks them to spice up her life by chemically transforming her into a mythological creature, isnt the fact that she came into contact with the essence of fantasy enough spice? Rather than having the main character be someone who wants excitement, it'd make more sense [with your plot line] if she was someone who wanted to be someone else. Or even something else. Though, with a little polishing I'm sure your story can be wonderful, though it isnt too creative, good stories arent always creative now are they? Good luck.
-Holabunny

[Harue]

Originally Posted by holabunny

I dont know what to make of it really. Seems kinda corny, a girl stuck in reality. how about more of a twist, add some romance. The thing is that the story is mildly redundant, she wants a twist, she meets fairies and mermaids, and asks them to spice up her life by chemically transforming her into a mythological creature, isnt the fact that she came into contact with the essence of fantasy enough spice? Rather than having the main character be someone who wants excitement, it'd make more sense [with your plot line] if she was someone who wanted to be someone else. Or even something else. Though, with a little polishing I'm sure your story can be wonderful, though it isnt too creative, good stories arent always creative now are they? Good luck.
-Holabunny

I'm sorry, I think you didn't quite understand what I was saying. That was just the general plot, I'm still working on details. And, yes, there will be some romance for Nanami eventually.

But I don't know what you mean by "it'd make more sense [with your plot line] if she was someone who wanted to be someone else. Or even something else".

[holabunny]

Whoops, sorry if im not being too clear, because it seemed by the way you were describing your story, that she wants to BE a mermaid or a fairy, so i thought it would make more sense if you had her as someone who didnt want to be herself.

[Ryuushii]

I don't mean to be rude or straight forward but the plot is corny and its typpicly cliche
it seems like any other type of magical girlish manga to me.
and when are you going to draw them?

[Harue]

Originally Posted by Ryuushii

I don't mean to be rude or straight forward but the plot is corny and its typpicly cliche
it seems like any other type of magical girlish manga to me.
and when are you going to draw them?

I'm never going to draw them! Becuase I'm the worst drawer ever and I give up on wirting manga becuase all my ideas are friggin' retarded and, once again, I'm the worst drawer ever!

[Ryuushii]

lol. don't be so pessimistic

[holabunny]

Originally Posted by Harue

I'm never going to draw them! Becuase I'm the worst drawer ever and I give up on wirting manga becuase all my ideas are friggin' retarded and, once again, I'm the worst drawer ever!

Let me tell you now, whether this was your intention or not, just because you put down a cry face and say that you suck at drawing wont make me feel bad and tell you otherwise. Thing is, i've never seen your drawings and all I have to go on is your summaries and the way you present yourself. The fact of the matter is, that your summaries aren't too original, they are corny and typical, I don't remember ANYONE saying they were retarded but then, author knows best so I'm assuming they must be. As for the way you present yourself, I don't know you, how you grew up, the way you talk or what you feel, but a chimpanzee could see your love for the art of creating manga is half hearted. By all means if you want to, give up, because the work of a mangaka who doesn't care about her work or her readers are as you would say "friggin retarded".
-Holabunny

[cowtopia]

Practice always helps.. even if your first story is a bit bad theres always room for improvement and remember criticism may always be aimed to improve you.. if you want inspiration look to the people around you and they might give you ideas that havent been used yet.. and theres always getting two ideas, melding them together and making small twists in them.. many possibilities.. depends on your outlook so dont put yurself down lolx.. go for yur ideas and everything with yur all and itll be good.

[Raina]

Doesn't matter if it's good or bad, just start with something. You'll gradually get better
Also, not all mangakas are talented at drawing. Some of them make weird faces to characters or draw long limbs...you just need to practice stuff like facial expressions, because they are the key to understanding the manga.